Wednesday, September 14, 2016

Story: Sinbad Third Voyage, The Giant

The storm was growing stronger and stronger, and it continued to pull us where we did not want to go. Through the night we ran about the ship trying to keep it under our control, but that was worthless. Our ship was wrecked in the harbor of what looked like a deserted island.
(Deserted island)

When morning struck we looked around trying to see if where we had crashed and if there was any evidence of inhabitants, but to no avail. As the day grew longer and our repairs to the ship seemed pointless we began to understand that there was no escaping and that we would have to make our home here. To learn the land and to get to know where the best place to make camp would be we split up into two search parties. One went to the west and my group went to the east, agreeing that we would meet back at the beach where our ship was along the sand. We took off, not knowing what we would find, but staying as positive as anyone who has lost everything. As we continued to search we found something that was quite strange. We came upon what looked to be a deserted castle with towers reaching up to the skies and with doors that took two men pushing as hard as they could to open.
(Castle)

We ran inside yelling with joy and feeling that we were the luckiest men alive. Then we heard what sounded like thunder. But looking through a window we saw a blue sun-filled sky. And again we heard a BOOM! Confused, we huddled together against each other. We sat there hearing each boom get closer and closer. Then in the blink of a moment the doors, which took two of our men, swung open with ease. In came the most hideous creature. It stood probably fifteen feet high with one eye and a face crawling with disgusting things so that I couldn't even imagine where it came from. Not knowing what to do, we tried to walk around the creature and out the door without it noticing. With one swoop of its giant hand it grabbed the man right next to me. It brought him up to its eye and in a quick fit of rage tore him into two and began to peel off the meat like it was a chicken leg. Struck by fear we froze in our places as the giant walked calmly back outside. Not knowing if there were more outside we decided it best to stay inside. This continued for two days. It would come in and have a lunch of one crew mate then leave until nightfall. The third night we began to devise a plan, or at least the half of men remaining did so. And so we put our plan into place and waited for the giant to return for its night of sleep. When it did the crew and I waited for it to fall asleep. Our plan worked to perfection. We were able to stab the eye of the giant leaving it blind and also tying its feet together for it to trip. We ran as fast as we could to the door and back down to the beach to find a sight we did not expect. Four ships were waiting in a harbor with guns pointed. We ran and ran as fast as we could and turning back we saw five giants chasing after us and gaining ground. Canons began to fire and falling around us was debris from the explosions. The giants still running had the strength to deflect the cannon balls, but more kept flying. The giants searching for something to attack the ships with began pulling out full palm trees near the shore and chucking them towards the boats, sinking two in the process.
(Giants fighting)
The two ships left continued to fire killing four giants, but one still stood. The crew was giving everything they had firing at will and trying to keep their ships afloat. The crew realized they weren't going to kill this giant.
(Ship)

One of my crewmates, noticing that the giant was about to sink another ship, stopped and turned around. Not knowing what he was doing we stopped, yelling at him to come on. He looked at us with tears in his eyes and said "Tell my wife I love her and that I died with honor." In that moment he charged the giant with nothing but a sharp stick for a sword. We ran only looking back to see our comrade picked up by the final giant and eaten whole. But his sacrifice was not in vain. In that moment of pause for the giant to feast on the man, a cannonball that was perfectly aimed drove itself right into the head of the giant. With a loud thunderous boom, the giant fell, dead in his tracks. We reached the ships stunned by what we had just seen. We and the men whose ships had been sunk were swimming towards the ships. The ships not wanting to wait for any more giants to come their way took off with what was left of my crew, myself and a few other men who had survived. Looking back we knew we would not have made it if not for the love of our crewmate. We will never forget his sacrifice and we will live each and every day with the heart of two men.


Author's note: I devised this story from Sinbad's third voyage, the Giant. This story tells of the capture of Sinbad and his crew after a storm had washed them on an island. The original had a beginning portion of the story that included little trolls that delivered the crew to the island with the giants, but for the sake of word count I omitted this section and just had the crew crashing on the island with the giants. It tells of an evil giant that one by one ate member of the crew until the crew devised a plan to escape and injure the giant. One change that was different from the original was that there was a battle at the end of this story between ships and giants. I thought this would be a more action packed plot than the original story where they escape on rafts that they had built with wood from the jungle. I wanted to throw in some skills and strength, like being able to throw trees, the giants had and help the reader understand the difficulty it was killing a giant. Also I added the sacrifice to keep into play the idea of love and sacrifice that can be given for those we care about.

Bibliography: Sinbad's Third Voyage by Andrew Lang; link to reading 


4 comments:

  1. Hi John, I was not familiar with the original story, so I am glad I was able to read your Author’s Note before I read your version! Your ending with the battle made it a lot more interesting than the way the original ending sounded. Overall, I really enjoyed getting to read your story and keep up the good work!

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  2. I really liked how we immediately dove into the story at the beginning. That really set the tone of a story of adventure and unexpected plot twists. It sounded like a journal entry because there was really no dialogue. I don't know if you planned that or if it just happened, but that would be a great way to tell another story. Tell it as if the main character is journaling their experienced. As for the story, it was continuously exciting and curious. I’ve read a few Sinbad stories from other classmates, but yours was so different. I think I cried a little when the man told the group to tell his wife he loved them and then ran to kill the beast. It was noble, but did he have to die? I was hoping he would pop out of the belly of the beast and live happily ever after. But like I said at the beginning, this story was full of surprises!

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  3. I honestly thought you were doing a retelling of The Giant and Nobody from the Odyssey right up until I read your author's note! I was even wondering why you chose to omit the Nobody part until you said it was an entirely different story (although I'm pretty sure these stories are just retellings of each other in different cultures). What I think is pretty funny though is by making the giants chuck stuff into the ocean at the end, you actually made the story more like the Odyssey even if you didn't mean to! I have no idea if you've read the Odyssey or not.
    Anyways, I loved the story but I think it could do with some punctuation. You especially could do with more commas throughout. I also think you're going to want to take another look at this sentence: "Then in the blink of a moment the doors, which took two of our men swung open with ease." The blink of a moment isn't really a phrase used by anybody and you may have omitted a word when trying to say which took two of our men (to open). But like I said I really like the idea and how the story turned out. The pacing was good and the ending wasn't too abrupt. I think you conveyed your moral pretty well without being over dramatic.

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  4. Nice story choice! Also, I like your theme of love and sacrifice, and how you’ve been changing stories to incorporate that more. Nicely done.
    You were right: having the danger and fighting at the end adds a good element of action to the story, so the audience is on the edge of their seats a little longer.
    I have a slight suggestion. I had pictured the giant as only being in the cave when he came in to eat someone, even though looking back I see that what you actually said was that he would “leave until nightfall”. Therefore, I was surprised and a bit confused by their plan at first. Is there any way you can foreshadow that a little more, so that the reader isn’t shocked that this is an option?
    Is there a particular reason they didn’t just kill the giant if they could stab his eyes out?
    What if you gave the crewmate who sacrificed himself a name, and perhaps a line of dialogue somewhere earlier on, so that the readers feel the loss more strongly?

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