Saturday, November 12, 2016

Story: The Demon-King

After a short time had passed the Monkey King returned to his kingdom. He found it desolate and as barren as a wasteland. "Children, where are my children." Out from behind the rubble and among the rocks apes by the hundreds came to him with fear in there eyes. "What has happened here," the Monkey King questioned. "He came in the night. We fought as well as we could and were able to hold off most of the attacks, but he was able to capture many," the apes replied looking down in anguish. "Where, where is my wife." In the battle that had happened the leader of the evil forces, the Demon King had swooped down and taken The Monkey King's wife. The Monkey King had to get her back and was willing to risk everything for her safety. So with one mighty flip the Monkey King went to the mountain that held the lair of the Demon King. "Come out you foul beast and meet your doom," the Monkey King yelled. The Demon King, who came out of his lair, stepped up to the Monkey King and was so much larger than him that he bellowed a big laugh knowing that this was sure victory. The Monkey King with his magical spear in hand began to jump all around the slower Demon King. The Demon King could not keep up with the Monkey King and was slowly being injured each time the Monkey King struck him with a blow. While the fight was occurring and while keeping the Demon King occupied all of the monkey entered the lair and began to help the captives escape to safety. The last one out of the cave was the Monkey King's wife. When the Monkey King saw his wife he became distracted for a split second and it took only that for the Demon King to connect one blow and launch the Monkey King against the mountain. His wife belted out in horror, but had no way of helping her husband. The Demon King believing he was close to victory began to walk towards the Monkey King desiring to kill the king and take all that he had for himself. The Monkey King was running out of options. He  knew that if he was to be defeated the Demon King would kill of his family and his wife. In a moment, he glanced at his magical spear, in which all of his power was held. He had no time and a decision had to be made. In an instant and with all of his strength remaining he threw the spear with the force of one giving everything he has. The spear connected right at the heart of the Demon King piercing through the thick armor. The Demon King fell and was defeated, but in that sacrifice the Monkey King had relinquished his power and his kingdom. The spear that had once belonged to the gods and killed Kings and brought nations under its power had been wiped from existence. For in the last attempt at defeating the Demon King the spear had been destroyed. In his moment of regret his wife, who had been watching from the side, ran to her husband and gave him a hug that told him that all of his sacrifice was worth it. On their journey back the Monkey King and his wife had began to talk about their future. In the middle of the conversation the clouds opened and Buddha appeared to the Monkey King. "You have proved yourself worthy to yield this blade." While the Monkey King looked up at the sky a magical blade moved towards him. For within the blade was the power and strength to rule his kingdom.
(Monkey King battling the Demon King)
Author's Note: In the original story the Monkey King was able to defeat the Devil King with ease. I made the change of making it a little more difficult and added that his wife was taken by the Devil King. I also added the spear that gave him his magical power. I wanted to add something that would be hard to give up. In the original he was never bestowed with a sword by Buddha because he didn't have a magical spear. I added that to show that sacrificing for others with bring reward for yourself in some circumstances.

Bibliography:Bibliography: The Monkey King by R. Wilhelm; link to reading

3 comments:

  1. John,
    I really like your retelling! You melted me in engaged the whole time! I like the magical spear and the blade! Adding the wife was a good reason for the king to go to battle. I haven't read this story but it looks really interesting! I could really in vision your story. Very nice! Can't wait to read more!

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  2. I love that your page isn’t just the basic background! It really helps to give background to the story…symbolically and physically.

    I think splitting up your story into more manageable chunks would make it easier for the reader to keep track of where they are in the story and not be as intimidated by its mass.

    Maybe you could add the facial descriptions of the monkey king so that the readers can imagine the scene better. (side note: in the middle of the paragraph, you said “all of the money” instead of monkeys).

    I really like how you took that part of the story and created a new storyline with it that makes the money king seem a lot more decent and deserving than he was in the original story. Maybe all he needed in the original story was a wife to give him purpose instead of the quest for immortality and fame. You did a really good job describing the scene of the fighting. I was confused in the beginning as to what happened when and why the king wasn’t around to save his wife. I think clarifying the background of the story would really help. Otherwise it was really entertaining and a great piece!

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  3. This was a great re-imagining of the Monkey King tale. In the Monkey King unit, he was able to defeat a lot of his enemies very easily and as a result he tended to be pretty arrogant about his abilities. By making him go through this tough trial and sacrifice all of his power, you gave the character some more depth that wasn't previously there. Nice work!

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