Showing posts with label Week 2. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Week 2. Show all posts

Thursday, September 1, 2016

Feedback Thoughts

(feedback)
I struggle a lot receiving feedback. I think it is because I tend to think of myself as a perfectionist and that other people just don't see things the right way or the way I see them. One of the comments on an article really stood out to me. It says be mindful that you have feedback, this is a good thing, it means you haven't maxed out on your potential yet. I love this idea because I always feel like I can't get any better at things, and that is not because I think I am the best at everything, it is just because I don't agree with a lot of people's advice. This shows me that the fact that people are even offering feedback is that I have room to grow and get better in a certain area.
I love giving feedback. I believe it is an opportunity to see someone reach a point where something clicks in their minds and you get to watch as their mind starts to realize the upward path that they are beginning to go on. It is such an opportunity to be encouraging, but also challenging.

Wednesday, August 31, 2016

Story: οικογένεια (Family)

Paris looked at her with lustful eyes, his desire overcoming any love for his country. Helen stood there aware of his stare and as he walked over to her. Before he could say anything she slapped him across the face and fled back to her true love, the King of Sparta, Menelaus. Paris filled with rage and unfulfilled lust began to plan his revenge, and from the corner of his eye he noticed a child, the child of Helen and Menelaus. In that moment, his mind was made up and in the blink of an eye he acted. Hector and the Trojans began their journey back unknowing of the kidnapped child in the lower deck of the ship. And soon they were far away.

Menelaus filled with rage burst through the door of his brother's war room as Agamemnon was discussing with his generals. "He's gone, those thieves took my child." This was the chance Agamemnon was looking for. He had been looking for the opportunity to attack the Trojans but had never been able to get the Kings of Greece together to do so. He sent out messenger after messenger to all of the Kings of Greece asking them to fulfill their promise of protecting the Queen Helen and her child. After months of preparation Agamemnon and the Kings of Greece set sail, with the largest fleet the world has ever seen, for the largest war the world has ever known.

Then there was Achilles, the greatest warrior in the world, and his cousin Patroclus whom he loved dearly. The war had been going on for three years now, the Greeks gaining ground slowly, but losing many men in the process. Achilles, who had been protecting his cousin from battle, knew that soon enough he would not be able to continue to do so. So in the wake of this understanding and with the knowledge that he would be leaving the possible chance at glory that was to be earned in the war that was happening, began to leave for Greece, not willing to risk the life of his cousin Patroclus, whom he loved more than even himself. Patroclus was furious at this decision, believing he was ready to fight and if it be to die. He had been secretly training with soldiers in other camps and learning of the struggles of battle. Filled with grief at the sacrifice his fellow Greeks are making he knew he could not leave and had made his decision of what to do. The day before they were to leave, Patroclus snuck out of his tent, and prepared for the upcoming battle that was to ensue. And so hiding himself among the battalion of troops he went to battle, not knowing of his fate and willing to give his life for his country. The battle began, Patroclus, kin of Achilles was a natural born killer. He killed dozens and fought bravely, but the forces were being overrun by Trojans cavalry. Not willing to leave his friend behind he stayed to hold off men while fellow Greeks were able to escape, and he was captured and brought back to Troy. The news soon returned to Achilles of the bravery of a long haired soldier who killed bravely and was captured, but he did not care, going to Patroclus' tent to let him know that it was time, he found it empty. Then it hit him, Patroclus was the soldier, knowing of his deep desire to gain glory in battle. This grieved Achilles deeply, and he planned his rescue of Patroclus.
(shows men using weapons and diplomacy)


Achilles, taking advantage of the full assault planned by Agamemnon on the front gates of Troy joined in with the forces. Soon the battle began, for hours the armies fought valiantly until the Greeks with Achilles at the helm pushed forward and continue to do so, barraging the front gate of Troy. Soon the gate was overtaken and the Greeks stormed into Troy, Achilles began his search and soon with his overtaking speed was far ahead of the Greek army and already up to the Kings' Palace. His ferociousness and emotion overtaking anybody who stood in his path. Then in the courtyard, he saw his cousin standing in chains next to the heroic Trojan warrior Hector. Hector was waiting for Achilles, as soon as he had heard of the cousin of Achilles had been captured he knew he would come. And the fight began, the fight that would be spoken of for centuries began. Both soldiers so skilled with a blade. Patroclus fearful of what was to become of his cousin, but Achilles was better than Hector. After minutes of fighting, Achilles found his mark and with one swing of the blade killed Hector. He cut Patroclus free of his chains and they began to flee. Soon they had run, all the way outside of the city. Both men exhausted, embraced each other with the love that only family could have. Their fate had not yet been decided, but what is true of these men was that the love of family could not be so easily broken and it shows how far one will go for those whom he loves.

Authors Note: This story was influenced by Homer's Iliad which originally tells the story of the war between Greece and Troy. King Agamemnon obsessed with power used whatever he could to attack Troy and baited Achilles to fight with the idea of eternal glory. While at war Achilles fell in love with a temple girl, who happened to be cousins of Prince Hector and Paris. It tells of the great fight between Hector and Achilles and Hector's demise. And finally it tells of Achilles and his sacrifice for love and ultimate death. I went along the path of family love is what ruled over all and left out lustful love of women who they barely knew, for the idea of family is the most important thing.

Bibliography: Homer's Iliad retold by A.J. Church Link to story.

Monday, August 29, 2016

Reading Notes Homer's Iliad, Part A

I accidentally did part B first, so here is my part A section of notes. Part of my last notes included some of this section so I won't repeat that. I am continuing to like the idea of family love that has been since birth as opposed to this lustful love of looks that these characters fall in to. My idea for the  reasoning of the great battle between the Greeks and the Trojans will continue along the plot of family love. I do not intend that Paris son of Priam would take Helen away from him. He would try to but in the end fail. What Paris does afterwards is what draws the war. In his anger at failing to woo Helen, Paris kills the new born son of Menelaus and Helen. Then he flees back to Troy and Menelaus and Agamemnon convince the Kings of Greece that he took Helen because this would be the only way they would fight for him. This would be good to cause controversy later in the story between the generals and the Kings as they would find out about Helen remaining in Sparta and the death of the baby.
(Helen of Sparta)

Bibliography: Homer's Iliad retold by A.J. Church. Link to story.

Reading Notes: Homer's Iliad, Part B

This story and specifically this half of the Iliad tells of the heroic and revenge minded Achilles take on Hector and the Trojans after the death of his cousin Patroclus. My favorite characters in this story are Achilles (a fan favorite and rightfully so) and surprisingly Patroclus. These cousins throughout the novel have different concepts on the reasoning behind why they fight and go to war. I would like to have some plot twist and throw something different within this story. I do not like Achilles' love affair and do not think that is a good reason for him to die within Troy. These people have not known each other and their love is based solely on lust. But the love of family, and specifically between Patroclus and Achilles is real and true. One twist I would like to add is that Patroclus does not die at the sword of Hector, but instead is captured by the Trojans. This would add to Homer's Iliad because it does not go on to after the death of Hector.
(Great battle between Troy and Greeks)
My story would continue to the end of the war. So Achilles and Hector's fight was not at the cause of Patroclus' death but at his capture and hope for a safe return. In the end, I believe Patroclus will still die, but in a different way. I would also like to hone in on the fight between Hector and Achilles. Adding to this fight an emotional side where Achilles while fighting is giving chances for Hector to release Patroclus and to save his own life. Hector uses this weakness of Achilles to fair better in the fight, injuring Achilles multiple times before losing his life by a swift move of Achilles. In the end I would like to talk about the glory that Achilles receives, because this is what drives him the most. There would be some great sacrifice and deed in the end that would cement his already greatness into a duel greatness between greatest fighter and mercy giver.

Bibliography: Homer's Iliad retold by A.J. Church, link to reading online.